The Great Tightening Tension Challenge

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Today 3C participated in an online writing activity with classes from 4 other schools in Queensland and South Australia (6 classes). As we write in real time, our work is published on a wall using Padlet. We use the Seven Steps to Writing Success program to help improve our writing.

We used a picture prompt to help us write a paragraph which was exciting and full of tension. One way of doing this is to use our senses and write what we see, hear touch, feel, taste and smell. We worked with partners to brainstorm our  ‘sense’  words. Then we wrote a paragraph using these words, trying to make the reader want to carry on reading. 

Here are some of our fantastic paragraphs. You can also visit our wall and see what all the other students wrote.

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Maizey and Max B

Bang! Bang! Three Great White sharks hit the boat. and gave us a huge fright. We tipped over in the boat, the sharks were getting closer and closer. The sharks opened their jaws. We were petrified.

Ryland and Shanayd

Smash smash! The huge sharks are attacking. I was crying. My heart was thumping. The shark attacked the bottom of the boat. I can see their massive jaws. I feel very afraid and the motor for the boat won’t start.

Brock and Llogan

Boof! I fell over. What hit the boat? I need to get to shore before this fearsome storm catches me. Bang! What was happening. Half of the oar was bitten off.  Suddenly I saw 3 massive Great White sharks circling our boat. I was petrified.  I was sweating, my heart was pounding. Now water was coming into the boat and we were sinking. What are we going to do?

Coral and Ben

Clump, clump. What was that? Oh no the engine has gone! I can hear thunder and lightening and now our boat is sinking. Suddenly i see three enormous sharks surrounding us. I taste sweat because I am so afraid.

Sajith and Jai

Thump THUMP went the boat! Lots of sharks were surrounding us. There were massive dark stormy clouds and there was thunder. The wavers were crashing all around us. I could taste the salt water. We were all scared. AAAHHH!

Cameron and Bobby

CLUNK! CLUNK! What was that? Oh no our motor had fallen off into the deep black ocean. Fierce hungry sharks were surrounding us. That is not any shark, that is 5 Great White sharks! We were petrified and nervous. Our hearts were hammering. 2 sharks were charging right at us. Would we live?